雅思写作终于6.5，大作文核心段可太太太重要了！

　　雅思写作徘徊在5.5分难以突破的考生，99%都在大作文犯过这样的错误：

　　考场上手都写酸了，其实废话占一半......

　　想要写作有个漂亮的成绩，需要让自己的大作文中的每一句话都有用，尤其是核心段！今天就用一篇考官范文，分段给大家讲讲大作文的基本结构~

　　题目：

　　A lot of young people do not know how to manage their money when graduating from high school. What do you think are the reasons? What can be done to teach them this important skill?

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　　介绍段

　　和题目相关的背景句（可以不写）或改写直接引出观点+预告个人观点

　　Many young people are leaving school without a basic and vital understanding of how personal finances ought to be managed in the adult world. 改写 This lack of knowledge is due to a lack of life experience and limited education which can be solved in two simple ways.

　　02 核心段

　　第一句必须是topic sentence（TS）。任何的感慨、不对段落做总结的句子都有可能导致后面的扩展困难。

　　第二句需要对TS有直接解释，任何跳跃的内容都会导致Coherence and Cohesion（CC）低分。

　　接下来的句子必须要对前一句做出顺利的解释，不能车轱辘话反复说同一个意思。核心段的句子基本要体现逐步降层的逻辑。

　　核心段1

　　原因1 One main reason why so many young people are unable to manage their own finances upon finishing high school is that they have been living along with their parents for free. As a result, they have never needed to earn a salary or save their money in order to pay bills.

　　原因2 Another cause is that schools do not factor personal financial management into their curriculum. Schools focus instead on classic subjects, such as maths, geography, history and languages, which means important life skills are not being: taught. Both teachers and parents are failing to prepare young people for the real world.（此句更像topic sentence，放开头可能会更好。）

　　核心段2

　　预告段落 There are two options for solving young people's inability to manage personal finances. Firstly, parents should spend time with their children teaching them how money is earned, budgeted and used for either: savings or expenses. One simple step could be for parents to start by teaching young children how to manage their pocket money and, as their child grows up, expand into more serious household expenses. Secondly, schools should incorporate life skills into their curriculum for final year students. In this way, children will be able to learn in a supportive environment how their finances need to be budgeted and managed to avoid debt problems later in life.

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　　结束段

　　结束段唯一的任务就是总结重复，不能出现新的内容或者与前面不一致的观点。

　　PS.升华有风险，使用需谨慎。　In conclusion, young people lack financial management skills due to the negligence of parents and schools, which can only be solved if both take more responsibility for equipping school leavers with the right skills.

　　真正消化了大作文的基本结构写法，就是获得漂亮写作成绩的第一步啦~详情咨询老师即可~