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摘要:雅思写作丢分的失败的开头汇总盘点

雅思培训小编哦分享的是:雅思写作丢分的失败的开头汇总盘点

开头一:过分简单,没有重点

典型失败案例:

Topic-The importance of environmental protection

This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

开头二:中式英文,人见人晕

典型失败案例:

Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life.

In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

Topic 2- The population problem

The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

雅思写作丢分的失败的开头汇总盘点

开头三:废话连篇不知所云

典型失败案例:

Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?

This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……

修改方案:开门见山,直奔主题

In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married.

Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information? (雅思真题)

Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.

Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection

Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!

开头四:观点模糊,态度暧昧

典型失败案例:

Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……

开头五:偏离主题,无轨电车

典型失败案例:

Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思真题)

I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

开头六:语法错误,惨不忍睹

典型失败案例:

Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished? (雅思真题)

About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.

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