雅思写作常见连贯与衔接错误没有合理使用代词进行上下文的指代

广州雅思培训小编要分享的是雅思写作备考类：雅思写作常见连贯与衔接错误没有合理使用代词进行上下文的指代

一篇6分作文的连贯性不仅体现在分段和连接词方面，考官还希望看到考生使用代词指代前面提到的名词或者句子。但有些考生由于词汇量有限，不了解指代技巧，便一味地重复使用某些名词，导致失分

例题：

Some people think that universities should pro vide graduates ntith the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true fction of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake,regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer.

What ,in your opinion,should be the main function of a university?【2009.10.24】

What knowledge and skills should universities provide has been argued for rmany years. Some people think that the true function of universities provide knowledge for their own purpose, but nowadays,more and more people point out that  · universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills according to the workplace.

The first reason for universities should provide these knowledge and skills is the students'needs.Obviously, the most of the students go to university purpose of is to get some knowledge and skills which could make them have the ability to get a job. If a uriversity does not provide these knowledge and skills, the students might not get a job and they would be very disappointed. As a result, the university would lose its students.

Moreover, providing knowledge and skills needed in the workplace makes a university progress.The new skills and information always are initiated in the worlcplace, so focusing on the needs of the

workplace the university could get sound strategies to do research and make it more modernisation.Lastly, providing these knowledge and skills could benefit our country which usually gives a Gnancial support to universities. Having these knowledge and skills, students are more easy to get a

In coclusion, it can be said that providing the knowledg. And skills which the workplace needs is every universities'basic function.

(注本文为真实的考生作文，为保证真实性，保留了文中的语法错误，特此说明。

下面是考官针对这篇文章的评语

Nevertheless, some relevant ideas and a position on the issue are presented. Ideas are organised and the structure of the answer is clearly signalled. paragraphing is not always logical, however. There is some good use of linkers, but thefe is also a lot of repetition due to inadequate use of referencing and substitution. The high level of repetition. r knowledge and skills'is repeated nine times] also indicates limitation in the range of vocabulary although, apart fiom lanwage given in the rubric, there is just sufficient additional vocabulary for the task. The answer includes attempts at complex sentence forms, but these are generally awkwardly phrased and tend to require some reading to understand.Nevertheless, there are examples of accluate complex structures.

考官在评语中指出，该考生过多重复关键名词knowledge and skillso其实，可以使用代词

(these skills/those abilities/such knowledge/this skill/such a skill)来进行指代，不仅可以丰富词汇，还有助于在。连贯"这一项上加分。